Konservativer Trottel

I suggested it because I thought the poem, though good, was in a way too direct, if that makes sense to you.  I am very, very new to poetry.  In fact, I have only written one poem, so I have been hesitant to post comments here.  But it did seem to me that the words of your poem didn't have the side-by-side tension of words that poems seem to need and that with the kind of underpinning that might come from two separate ideas being held within one structure, that might happen.   No matter.  Just an idea.