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I like the way your poem reads.  Your "picking bones" reference I think was the most poignant part of your poem, as it references back to the haunting memories which never really fade.  I also like the minimal style of this, as I'm one to loose interest pretty quick with the lengthy poetry, no matter how well-written it may be;)  You've conveyed your mood very clearly in this. 

 I'm a very visual person, and I would center your poem, I think it would look better.

This pause
in memory
of times long forgotten,
a skeleton dressed for the kill.
Heaven confessed although not laid to rest.
The naked stalk of childhood haunts
locking doors, picking bones.
Unforgiving,
this pause.

by Sinnaminsun on Mar. 1 2008