Two White Birds Have Come to Manzanillo

Kat ~

A few suggestions: Overall, I think that italics would better suit the titles that the apostrophes. I think this would make it blend together more while still highlighting what is needed.

I enjoyed the opening stanza. Though with the second stanza, I feel as though the second line could be worded differently. Maybe inverting the line slightly? Something like "built of sunlight-made trees."

3^rd: Is it supposed to be "Untititled" or is that a typo? I'm not sure.

8^th: Maybe "...about-to-be-peeled" just to keep the line succinct. This stanza seems awkward to me.

Your last three are excellent, especially "Manzanillo."

I am someone who honors other artists a lot in poetry. It is a great thing, to offer someone else your words, even if you never meant them. And it is always with sadness that we lose one that we see as a kindred spirit, but it seems not all is lost. There are still his paintings and now your write. A little more tweeking and I think it will be lovely. I enjoyed the haiku serenity of each "piece" and have never been in a forest of such diversity.

~Emeya