and she never

Most of the suggestions in this place involve cutting stuff out - so, just to be perverse, I wanted to read:

she coughed
and she spluttered
and ponderously uttered
why would...

which would enhance the nursery rhyme feel of the last section - as a contrast to the previous 'cement/grindstone/bone' stanzas, but still reflecting the 'silly girl' context...or am I missing the point completely :>