I will speak my life

Actually, I totally agree with Laura, but I'd also like to add that you almost lost me with S1. It just seemed like something I'd read a thousand times before, and then you go and be awesome (which is apparently your thing) .. until the last line, which isn't horrible but I do agree with Laura that it's a bit on the trite side, which verges on tragic when the rest of a poem is so good.