By Myself

just a question on the sound of this. Obviously this isn't a particularly readable poem, in the sense of getting up and reading it, but, still, I wonder if the middle part  with the alone and dead..

Isn't a heart beat THUMP thudthud, THUMP thudthud

What if you did 

A

      (d)

      (e)

L

     (a)

     (d) 

O

    (d)

   (e)

N 

   (a)

   (d)

E

Type of thing? to get the heartbeat in there?