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Triolet

I have often wanted to write triolets, and I think I remember the rhyme scheme

      A  - First rhyme
      B  - Second rhyme
      a   -  Rhymes with 1st line.
      A  - Identical to 1st line.  
      a   -  Rhymes with 1st line.
      b  -  Rhymes with 2nd line.
      A  - Identical to 1st line.
      B  - Identical to 2nd line.

 

Is that correct? But I don't remember if there is a syllable requirement ?

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Leanne Hansonfrom Just west of the lounge room
Associate, 3708 posts

on June 8 2007


Exactly right, Laurie.  These are usually 8 syllables per line (the French are quite anal like that) which keeps it fairly small and neat. 

I'm so pleased to see you jumping into this! 

Deadpoetsmilk

on June 13 2007


Indigo Cabaret

We tip the iris to our lips, and kiss

the flowing purple skirt. Unraveling time

as petals fall from weakened stems.  Dismiss

us. Tip the iris to your lips, and kiss

the flower pinned inside your breath.  You'll miss

it when it's gone, unless ---- you see no crime.

We tip the iris to our lips and kiss

the flowing purple skirt unraveling time.

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  • I'm well aware of the foot variation in the second refrain, i was thinking of pronouncing it as unrav'ling...but that would be awkward, but then I thought maybe others would see how time/meter unravels for that split second, coiciding with the line of the poem...I don't know...anyhow, critique the hell out of hit.  I'm strong. 

Love your friendly neighborhood port-a-potty.

 

Ryan the Unicorn Wilbur

 

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Leanne Hansonfrom Just west of the lounge room
Associate, 3708 posts

on June 13 2007


I promise I'll come back and critique, Ryan -- I'm just dropping in and out but I had to say thank god you're back.
Deadpoetsmilk

on June 14 2007


Thanks Leanne.  I'm glad to be back and learning.

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