![]() Leanne Hansonfrom Just west of the lounge room Associate, 3708 posts | Exactly right, Laurie. These are usually 8 syllables per line (the French are quite anal like that) which keeps it fairly small and neat. I'm so pleased to see you jumping into this! |
Deadpoetsmilk | Indigo Cabaret We tip the iris to our lips, and kiss the flowing purple skirt. Unraveling time as petals fall from weakened stems. Dismiss us. Tip the iris to your lips, and kiss the flower pinned inside your breath. You'll miss it when it's gone, unless ---- you see no crime. We tip the iris to our lips and kiss the flowing purple skirt unraveling time. _____________________-
Love your friendly neighborhood port-a-potty.
Ryan the Unicorn Wilbur
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![]() Leanne Hansonfrom Just west of the lounge room Associate, 3708 posts | I promise I'll come back and critique, Ryan -- I'm just dropping in and out but I had to say thank god you're back. |
Deadpoetsmilk | Thanks Leanne. I'm glad to be back and learning. |