the owl

I find the "when spoken of" awkward. The voice suddenly passive, and the concept a bit off, feeling like a non-sequitar to the previous line. Similarly, "my voice the sounds of" might be improved with something more direct, like "my voice runs thick / overflowing..."

The energy of this is impressive, derived by a bluster of words in iambs and spondees. It is very descriptive, but as a purely personal preference, I would have liked a framing of the emotion within an idea - either: Why you are the tempest and not the owl, or what the result has been (or will be).

Finally, I enjoyed reading this and rereading it. It's direct and superior to most posts on this or any other site I've visited.

Alcuin