light (v1 & v2)

This is quite provocative, sensual, and very alluring! I made some small suggestions, merely for flow more than anything. The excess words seemed unneeded for meaning. I love this read. 

candle shadows dance

hesitantly swaying flame        

provoked by my breath

we make love in my dreams

full, the tear falls in  

swollen trail, hot, malleable

on my fingertip  

returned to flame 

to weep again

----- fairy dust, I want fairy dust for Christmas please.