Dinner Time

did you add the references to aging?  I'm afraid my memory isn't good enough to know for sure, but if so its something I'd run with - a new wrinkle to what you've already begun (so to speak!).  If you find any other angles to work in, I'd go with it.  And maybe move the personifications a little more into the background, only hinted at rather than overtly stated.  I'm not sure that they advance the poem so much as detract from the powerful feelings at the core - even though you use them to express those feelings. Still, I think you're heading in a good direction.