wake up call - edited

I like what you wrote here. 

I think it might be a little too wordy and it throws the rhythm off.   I think if you just moved some words around or got rid of a few words it would work better.  Also the last line is forced and not much rhymes with clasp....maybe a different word?

Here are a few ideas:

In this dusk filled darkened room
I see beyond where shadows loom

On the desk a picture stands
my beloveds holding hand

Wandering back to that day
when our trouble seemed far away

Behind the tears of salty tracks
brain and heart face the facts

Life's reminder a fragile clasp
within my power outside my grasp