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An interesting approach. In S2, I find "...pull her lungs inward, impaling her / on her own ribcage..." a bit awkward. Perhaps instead of "her" twice, something along the lines of "...inward / impaled on her own ribcage..." or "self-impaled on her ribcage" would work better. Similarly, the "from where" is a bit much. Perhaps "origin" instead of "originates" could be used.
I liked the "close to the baseboards" phrase. It's a nice image, like dust or lint that gathers at the edge.
Alcuin
by Alcuin of York on Oct. 6 2007