The Intricacy of Dehumanization

To be perfectly honest, this really doesn't do anything for me.  The first line is not correct meter -- you can fix this by substituting each for every if you like.  I really don't know why you've introduced a third rhyme in the third stanza -- I'm ok with playing with the rules of form but it would make much more sense if you'd introduced it in the first line of the second stanza.  Just repeating the last few words of your first repeater is effective and takes a bit of the formal tone out of this, however I just find it stilted and really not saying much.  Sorry.