Religious Experience - Shakespeare's Monkeys

The rhythm and meter are not consistent, but if you did not intend them to be, that's OK. There is a class of poetry called "free-verse rhyme". I wrote a poem in quatrains, like this, with an ABAB rhyme pattern, repeating the same rhyme sounds between stanzas, as you've done here. The main reason, I suppose, was because a) I could; and b) because I'd never done it before. Frankly, what I learned is that it tends to be boring because of the repetitive sounds (mine was 5-stanzas long). Oh well! In any case, I'm glad I did it because I learned something.

The best part of this is the "back of the moon" line & the following line. The first line was also interesting and well-stated. Some of the lines strain for their rhymes. Also, "spoon" is a bit outdated. And I think it's safe to assume the "he" whistling wasn't God, but your boyfriend - unless, of course, you think of him as God during sex.

Overall, this had charm. It just seemed a bit awkward in places.

Alcuin