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Instead of "the conquest of all in their path", why not try "to conquer all along their path" or some such? That will get rid of a rather uncomfortably stressed line. Otherwise, I shall simply agree with Alcuin -- I imagine I do know what you mean 
The fourth stanza, and the last, stand out as particularly strong -- but there's really not a weak one.
The fourth stanza, and the last, stand out as particularly strong -- but there's really not a weak one.
by Leanne on June 26 2007