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What are your thoughts on the last two lines? They feel a little abrupt to me . . . as if you could find a way to make the same point, but more in line with the rest of the poem . . . her eyes gazing out the window . . . or something . . . I don't know. Then again, I think I've been out voted around here on my personal enjoyment of subtlety.
by White_Feather on June 8 2007