from the Outside Looking In - Chapter One

Hi Shannon! I think I read the first 3 chapters from this a few months back... and I STILL want to know what happens with these two people. Which, as White Feather says...is a good thing for someone writing a longer fictional piece. You want the reader to care about your characters and what happens to them. You definately have that going in this story... I do think that in these types of novels you need to be more vividly descriptive, I mean depending on how long a piece you want to write... Shorter romances seem to be more "to the point" with setting the scene and the longer, full length novels are more wordy and descriptive, making the reader feel as though they are actually there with the characters. I would like to read more of this story.