Before the Sea

Intelligent cheerleading would be much easier for me if this dang comment box had spell check. I usually have no technical advice to offer,only the feelings and thoughts the poem left me with. And it is hard to do so and appear intelligent when I tend to type in my own language. But I am a rebel like that...lol.

I really like the changes you have made to this. It was a very tender and endearing piece to begin with, but by tightening it up a bit your imagery and sentiment really stand out.