The Bewitching Mist

The main thing this needs work on is the meter. Throughout the poem it has a beat somewhere, but it gets thrown off a lot. I think if you read it out loud that would help to see exactly where you stumble when you read it.

Like with the first stanza i think it would sound better if you had "joined" instead of "came":

"One dark night
When the moon was green
Six witches joined together
On a wicked Halloween."

And in the second stanza, i think it sounds awkward because "unkempt" and "crept" don't really rhyme so much, but here's my suggestion:

"Their hair was dark,
Straggly and unkempt,
Black hats, pointy noses,
Under the witching tree they crept."

And so on. I'm terrible at rhyming and not so good at meter, but i hope i helped. It's a promising poem. Keep us posted.