Dumb Show

Yes, I like it, particularly your deft touch with enjambment, a rare and delightful thing to encounter these days.  I wonder though -- since you're not at all fond of rigid metric structure, have you thought about experimenting with alternating line lengths to avoid the da-dum syndrome?  For example,

It only happens in the movies-

a dying lover clasped upon expiry.

I spoof it up - an actress dies

on celluloid with such dramatic irony