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haha, did you write thi about my best friend and I?
First, I love it, I always enjoy your poems Jen.
Some suggestions:
- "I can't slide over", how about "I can't even slide over"
- "I thought that you" , how about "I thought that perhaps you"
- "there is a way"; how about "there is always a way"
----- Life is what happens while you wait for great things.
by Shan on May 17 2008