dead space

this is incredibly profound writing......as words about killing and dying should be, but aren't always.....starkly to the point, yet poignant......my only suggestion would be to move the line, "somewhere men are dying" to the very end of the poem.....it's such a great line that it speaks to so much more than your poem......and would shine like a light in the darkness as the ending thought the reader is left with.....to contemplate......Kat