Leanne - Mos, great title first up, and secondly, great rhythm and use of sound. I know it's fairly insignificant, but the caps at the start of every line is a bit on the annoying side. Quick edit and you'll be set.
Mosquitobyte - he he, I knew you'd get the meaning behind the title, not so sure about the rest of the world!
This is one of those rare pieces for me that actually went through 3 days of work before I was happy with it. Glad you like, but I'm stubborn at times and will keep my indolent capitals. :P
Mos.
Colleen - Leanne, I'm curious, why the capitals don't work for you? what is the "rule" regarding them?
Leanne - There's no rule. I just find that caps at the start of a line break the flow, I'd rather see them only where they're required rather than just as a matter of habit. Actually, I'd rather see everything in a poem done deliberately and not as a matter of habit. But, since Mos likes 'em capped, it's his call.
Mosquitobyte - he he, let's just say, that in my case....it's a deliberate habituation...or perhaps a habitual deliberation? :P
Mos
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