2- Aphasic 
on June 24 2008
What's your reason for de-versifying Jen?
I don't know if you wrote this in 'unversed' form originally, but I suspect not, as there are capitals remaining that don't appear to belong - (Like / In) - though the 'In' line reads as though it was previously the first of a stanza. (?)
As there is no (other) punctuation, maybe you should lose the opening 'H'?
Someone help me out here - does the use of capitals (after stops) constitute an element of punctuation, or does that stuff belong in the land of ZZZs...
3- Jen 
on June 25 2008
Thanks, this is different from my usual dribble.
My reason for trying to de-versify...I like to try different styles of writing. I guess I didn't feel like writing about snots and boogers today;)
The misplaced capitals are a result of writing it centered in Microsoft Word and my carelessness. I didn't even notice them. It wasn't originally written in verse. I tried to write it just like I was talking.
4- Aphasic on June 25 2008
"I tried to write it just like I was talking."
That how it reads Jen - and no half-truths here, it seems :>
I'm curious - did you intend 'hollowed liar'? I previously read it as 'hollowed lair', as that's what the 'hollowed' adjective suggested (a covert campaign) - but liar is good too [poetically], a trait transformed into a whole personality/alter ego, residing in a moral void (the lair).
1- Derma Kaput
on June 24 2008