Discuss: February's Winds

February's winds weep
As hungry lions creep
And Sheppard's keep watch over their flock

While the little lambs sleep
The promises they keep
Tames lions with a tick of the clock

3 comments

1- Anstey on Feb. 17 2008

this is one 'l' away from from naughty.

2- Shan on Feb. 17 2008

hey jen, I've missed your poems, they always lift my spirit, just like Silverstein does!

Suggestions:

How about adding "little" before lambs?

S2 L1 and L2 are missing just something small to me.

Maybe:

For the little lambs fast alseep

And the promises they surely keep

Either way, I like it, and I've missed you!

----- Life is what happens while you wait for great things.

Life is what happens while you wait for great things.

3- Jen on Feb. 17 2008

Stephan,

How funny you noticed that...gutter mind:)

Thanks Shannon....I'm glad you are back and writing for two!

I fixed a few things:)

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