Discuss: Explicit - Shakespeare's Monkeys

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1- Tracey on Apr. 16 2007

Nice "expose" of the right to express oneself in the manner best suited to the subject. From time to time I think the rhythm may be a bit off, but I'm not the best person to ask about things like that. Fun, smart piece.

2- Alcuin of York on Apr. 16 2007

Tracey is right. The meter varies between iambs and trochees, and some even-numbered lines have only 3 beats, while S3L4 has 4. Also, accession is “to” a status or condition, not “of” one.
The poem seems to suggest that your submissions only hint at smut, while you’re keeping the really good stuff to yourself. Shame on you!
Alcuin

3- Shannon McEwen on Apr. 18 2007

I love the last stanza. I agree that it seems to follow one pattern and then another, but unlike the educated folks I have no idea what its called and coming from someone whose iambic stinks (that would be me and not you!) I can't help much in that area.

I can only say I like the topic and the way you expressed it here.

Life is what happens while you wait for great things.

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