2- Jennifer Ragan 
on Jan. 3 2009
Thanks Bill,
I like your suggestions, it does read better. Maybe someday I'll add more to this:)
3- Norm milliken on Jan. 4 2009
Is the change the spacing in line #2? Whatever, I really like this. You've managed to say a lot with so very little. Kudos to you!
1- Suter Bill
on Dec. 29 2008
As you rattle and hiss
coiled up in lies
I wonder if spite
has forked your tongue
and I can only imagine
how sharp your fangs are
Frorgive me for meddling with your work, but this slight tweak reads a bit better to me. Also, you really have me wishing you'd written more because I'm enjoying the visual.
Bill