Dormitory Furniture

my first thoughts:

• The first stanza is pretty weak.

• I'd change the title, incorporating the idea of the first stanza, which is really the frame upon which the second is resting. L1/2 I think, are the title. 

• L3-5 seem to be eminently cuttable.

• I'd be interested to see you ad some book titles.

-  what is scratched in pencil on there?

• any details about the mask? Feathered?Theater? Batman?