my grandmother

I find this to be a very intriguing poem! I love the specifics that you have used as it grounds the reader in a time and place. I would love to see some descriptives though. A few well placed adjectives would give me some color in my mind...however, if you wish, you could use darkness like blacks and grays to keep a darker vision for the reader because this poem has some seriousness to it that needs to not be lost. The never again seeing her mother brought tears to my soul....
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Rene'