Swinging Song

I used to read to my son every night, and the best books were the one's that tickled us both.  So I don't think it hurts to keep the adult audience in mind, but keep in mind that its a subset of the adult audience - the one that reads to children, not the one that quibbles over the meter in sonnets or the nuance of erotic verse.  Though there's undoubtedly some overlap.

In the case of this poem, I've often found that going over the top with rhyme and repetition can have a wonderful effect on kids.  I think there's room for improvement in this one, but I like the idea.