More in kneel next to me
kneel next to me
"Weave together shadow" grates for me. I feel the "shadow" should be plural. The image is nice, but that particular line seems off.
The 3rd stanza is the best by far. You alliterate in small doses, which is just enough for this piece.
Alcuin
The 3rd stanza is the best by far. You alliterate in small doses, which is just enough for this piece.
Alcuin
by Alcuin of York on June 10 2007