Cheerios

First of all, the sentiment here is really very sweet. And the genuine love shines through. Whoever reads this and misses it misses the entire point and essence of this piece. For that alone it is well done.

 However, as poetry goes, this requires a bit of work I think. 

 S1 - L3, I think you could cut the 'and' and add the intial cap since there's a period in the line before. I wonder if there might be another word you could use besides 'between' -- i don't see a reason for the echo of the fingers and the prackets

 I'll come back to a few other things, but the part that i struggled with the most was the last stanza. This stanza is way too preachy. It seems like  a blugeoning instrument after a fairly gentle soft pillowy piece. I think it'd be great if you could find a more natural approach to that point you're trying to make there.

• stephan