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I like the way this poem is evolving, and especially really like the ending. A couple thoughts . . .
When I read this, I find the word repetition a little awkward "mats" and "mat"; "floating" and "floats". Also, wondering if "clutches tightly" wouldn't work just as well as the more conventional "tightly clutches?"
by White_Feather on June 5 2007