11. empty

Thanks so much guys! I really, really appreciate/need the input. I know where i want to go with this poem, but it's not quite coming out the way i want it to. What i'm struggling the most is with the passage of time thing. I don't want to make the poem too long, as the others in the series aren't very long. I want the poem to be as minimalist as possible, without sacrificing content or making it too long (is that even possible?).

I also need to know how you interpretted it. It's supposed to be about the narrator having an abortion, not a miscarriage. I was wondering if it came off that way in poem or if i need to rework that.

Anyways, PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE if there's anything else bugging you about this poem, say it. I can take the crticism!