red

Nothing much of use to say. Having said that, I'll go on (but not on & on)

Not sure about 'jots' in conjunction with 'love letter'

Clunky is: '...were so red as that'

'Before she fell asleep.': that is so sweet an expression, I think you may get a hummingbird feeding on it...

+ what Christy said, Derma displayed and I'm incapable of thinking.