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Good morning, Mr. Anstey:)

I think there's lovely imagery in this that gets overshadowed by the overt presence of narration.

Grandfather is introduced as 'other' from an 'over here' point-of-view, but the narration presents Grandfather's observations with ownership. 

I don't think this particular point-of-view duality works to benefit this poem as it stands now..but...I'd be interested in its development.