I can't tell if the tide is coming or going

Hi Colleen -- a few thoughts on S2:

some I see have lost their inner/selves -- this might be read as 'some (that) I see', and I wonder if it would be better to discard the 'I see'?

are they the lucky -- the lucky (ones), I assume?

to shed/their shell -- 'they' shed, so should that be plural (shells)?

or were they simply/breakfast -- or are they simply/breakfast; that would be more consistent with the tense used in the rest of the stanza.

It's late and I'm dead on my feet; well, actually on my arse, but who's counting? :>)