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:) I like this one a lot, the only suggestion I have is that "she" should be used consistently throughout, insted using "you". Here's my revision:
Someone has happened to me
She moved me
Confused me
She walked right out the door
Then I was just passing time
Nothing on my mind
When she left
The fear returned
My fractured mind recoiled
I remembered more
So I bleed pure
She came inside my mind
Took me into hers
Wasn’t sure what I would do
She gave me much to say
Never felt like this before
A void so pure
by Sinnaminsun on Jul. 8 2008