Thoughts on Death 2

Oh - poetry, but then what did I expect from pags? :>
Distinctly whelming - a pleasure to read.
One line, well no, one 'turn of phrase', did seem incongruous...the penultimate line, where "can't even" seemed uncharacteristically casual/informal, in contrast to the writing style preceding it. Would you consider something like 'can barely recognise'?
I guess I'll be looking for 'Thoughts on Death 1'.

[Edited to erase evidence of my ignorance]