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A little bit more mutiny wouldn't hurt, frankly.  I like what you've done with your rhyme and meter here, it works a treat -- though I'm less keen on all the "and" starts, such a high percentage in a small poem stands out quite a bit.  Otherwise, this is a powerful social commentary and dark reptilia has a delightfully sinister feel to it.  I actually wouldn't mind seeing another stanza, though you'd be hard pressed to find one more rhyme for the first line -- maybe two more stanzas, using different rhymes, slotted in between?

by Leanne on May 13 2008