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Norm - I can see Tracey's point here, not much going on beyond description, an almost impersonal retrospective.
I'm just wondering if that was your point here - the mundane nature of that period & place, an emphasis on routine (it was/there was/we hauled/we slept). That would be consistent with your last stanza virtually repeating the first - as if to say 'What more is there to say?'. I don't know much about Montana, or barley farms, but I imagine the landscape is (in)distinctly homogenous, and the lifestyle somewhat uneventful. As Tracey remarked, snow on the ground in the middle of July would probably be regarded as a freakish phenomenon, but you choose not to elaborate. Is that a device designed to highlight by means of understatement? Is that the reason why these memories persist? Or is it a function of repetition, similar to the 'learning by rote' scenario?
Some feedback on the feedback please Norm
I'm just wondering if that was your point here - the mundane nature of that period & place, an emphasis on routine (it was/there was/we hauled/we slept). That would be consistent with your last stanza virtually repeating the first - as if to say 'What more is there to say?'. I don't know much about Montana, or barley farms, but I imagine the landscape is (in)distinctly homogenous, and the lifestyle somewhat uneventful. As Tracey remarked, snow on the ground in the middle of July would probably be regarded as a freakish phenomenon, but you choose not to elaborate. Is that a device designed to highlight by means of understatement? Is that the reason why these memories persist? Or is it a function of repetition, similar to the 'learning by rote' scenario?
Some feedback on the feedback please Norm
by Aphasic on Mar. 29 2008