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Exercise 1a

A Haiku any topic

three perfect cherries
in winter sunlight rotting
... the smell of springtime

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Stephan Ansteyfrom Lowell, MA
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on Jan. 28 2008

I need to learn to follow instructions.
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Stephan Ansteyfrom Lowell, MA
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inspired from anstey on Jan. 29 2008

three bright red cherries
winter shadows on  oak desk
... a scent of late spring

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Jones, Paganinifrom Hyde in Cheshire
385 posts

on Feb. 1 2008

As far as I can tell you did follow instructions. Both times. Haiku 2 is prettier. haiku 1 has more potential in my opinion but needs work to mend the language :D Might you consider a rejig of line and word order?
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Stephan Ansteyfrom Lowell, MA
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inspired from Pags on Feb. 1 2008

I might not be smart enough to use suggestions all the time, but I always consider them and I'm never insulted.

Stephan Anstey

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on Jan. 28 2008
from Lowell, MA

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