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this is something between inspired spittle and common spew. I'm still working on it but needed to share

She was in the wheat field sleeping. Away from the barns
her small body low in the grasses and hulls,
wheat stalks fanning

slow dreams
of wood-smoked air draping the damp fields of golden rod, sweet pea and thistle;

clouds stirring and the storm thickens
the first cold drops.

Beads dissemble down,
down on her ear,
down on tongue's tip,
cold lobs catching
and the bead-bursts streaking her face.

Her auburn hair wet frosted
strands in new morning dew,
wet against her cheek,
her head resting here
where broken seeds scatter and stalks ooze and
foam. I was in a wheat field dreaming

huddled in my father's favorite red flannel
stolen from the moth ball hall closet
that damn cramped,
damned roughshod house of "don't touch anything,"
I dreamt I was in a wheat field

dreaming the rain
dreaming the swollen seed bodies as they scattered and clotted
the eaves of these weary barns

 

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Colleen Sperry
622 posts

on Sep. 1 2009


 hey Tina!!   Welcome!!  Its so great to see you here!  I'm thrilled to be able to read your writings.  I can't wait to see what you do with this piece.    Are you looking for suggestions on edits? or just putting it out there?     

Tina Boyle
3 posts

on Sep. 1 2009


Hey, thanks!
I would love some feedback from you!

Tina

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Stephan Ansteyfrom Lowell, MA
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inspired from Colleen Sperry on Sep. 4 2009


Great to meet you Tina. This is really an impressive first salvo!


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Stephan Ansteyfrom Lowell, MA
Associate, 6232 posts

on Sep. 4 2009


in S6 is that mothballed - seems like the tense might be wrong there. I love references to mothballs. The odor is such a strong memory for me, I react to it physically.

There's a definite midwestern vibe to this that I like a lot.

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Colleen Sperry
622 posts

on Sep. 6 2009


 Tina.. I am not sure of any edits .. however, I love what you did with stanza's 5 and 6..     

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